Jekyll Island Beach 2012

Jekyll Island Beach 2012

Saturday, November 5, 2011

His Window

The Rogue Speaks:

I am so far behind this week! I was late posting my "A" word, and could not in all good conscience start writing my Centus until I had read all the other "A.s." Whew! That was a monumental task! There were a lot of great ones, however, and well worth the effort!

Now, on to my offering for this week's Saturday Centus:

Jeremy sat in his chair by the window, looking out on the soccer field below. Despite the bright warmth of the early autumn day, he was wrapped snuggly in a soft, cozy blanket.

The young players were running, calling to each other, kicking, and cheering. It looked like so much fun. Jeremy's mind began to wander, and he saw himself on that field, kicking the ball into the net. If only that could happen!

“Sweetie, are you o.k.? Do you need anything?” Jeremy’s mom called out from the doorway.

Jeremy turned, and said in a small voice, “New legs.”


anitamombanita said...

Wow! Nice twist at the end. ... the flu maybe...but I wasn't expecting that!

jfb57 said...

Oh! How sad! I loved how you drew me in with the great descriptions of the view then pow! Great post!

Bethe77 said...

WOW! I wasnt expecting that! Good write.
Held me all the way then sent chills down my spine. So sad and heart breaking.

Kathy Felsted Usher said...

Awww. This is so sad, especially for kids. This could be the start of a good kids book on how not to leave anyone out- there's lots he could do. Good job.

JJ said...

I have not been around lately. I do miss your writing. A book, perhaps?

Jaquandor said...

Another wistful one...very nicely done.

JDaniel4's Mom said...

I so feel for him. I hope he get new legs.

Sue said...

Boy, that's a tough one.

Interesting take on this and a creative direction to go with it.


Tammy said...

Aww. Way to pull at the old heart strings. But in an engaging way!

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

Judie, we did have similar takes on the prompt, but your write was so much more compelling. Excellent! laurie

nothingprofound said...

This hit home, Judie. In fifth grade my daughter had a mysterious foot injury which the doctors could not diagnose. She went overnight from being an award winning gymnast doing front handsprings and backflips to being confined to crutches and a wheelchair. You can imagine what a wretched time that was in her life. Fortunately, we found a doctor in NYC who figured the problem out and she was eventually restored to her former self.

askcherlock said...

This is so well done, Judie and heart-wrenching. It probably happens more times than we can ever know. This was a poignant post.

Sarah said...

Poor boy. Nice ending! Lizzie looks so cute with that hat!!

Jenny said...

Oh Judie. This post reminded me so much of my youngest sister!


Poignant and touching.

I loved this.