The Rogue Speaks:
Ah, yes! Jenny's Saturday Centus! Too much salty popcorn at the movie yesterday has left me with a head like a water balloon! So if my centus is completely stupid, will someone please let me know so I can re-write it? Thanks, pals!!
He had been such an idiot! Why couldn't he learn to keep his fat mouth shut! This time he had really done it, though.
"Out!" she snapped. "Get out! You have NO empathy! You have NO filter! You have hurt me for the last time!"
Now he had to find a way out of this mess and make amends for his stupid remark. O.k., so he wasn't good with words--that much was clear. Plus, he wasn't good at make-up gifts. He stood in front of the display, trying to choose. Everything depended upon this single card. He looked frantically for a Hallmark moment.
Jekyll Island Beach 2012
31 comments:
Not completely stupid at all. Completely realistio I'd say...some think a card or flowers fix everything...this guy obviously needs some real help.
Oh this is absolutely top of the list quick and straight to the top! Popcorn overload or not! Your opening sounded much like my first hubby, although once he stepped into Hallmark it wasn't him any more...I don't think he ever got me card until after our divorce....no rewrite...in fact I'm hoping he wins her over! Great stuff !
This prompt is bringing out some great Centus offerings.
And yours is among them!
=)
Oh Very good! I did like that :o)
Very well done...sounded a bit like me when I'm on a rant...UGH ! Not a pretty situation but you captured it so very perfectly !!!
Hahaha I really liked this one! Hallmark shouldn't be one to depend on so much but you set up the need really well for your character.
I hope he picked out the one with the pug in the wonder woman costume. :)
About the writing, it works, but I missed the earlier entires.
On a personal note, I would rather live Hallmark moments. Women are smarter than cards and flowers.
Lissa: I might consider sending a card to Linda Carter.
Most men aren't. I often wondered if my husband asks for help picking out some of the cards I get from him. Unless they references certain bodily sounds they just seem so not his style. :) ~Ames
JJ, no one has complained, so I guess I got it right on the first take.
neat one...
thanks for sharing,
:)
I love the last line ... perfect! i do just love your sense of humour Judie!
'a Hallmark moment' - I love it:-)
I don't know why you were worried about this, it was great! That poor guy, I hope he picked just the right card. And it probably wouldn't hurt to grab some chocolate while he's at it! Kat
NO! Not stupid at all! Loved it!
Very relevant, Judie. It's relevant because men are stupid like that. I mean, well, that's what I mean. Great centus.
xoRobyn
I say bring on the popcorn, because that's great. Loved the ending.
This really worked, it wasn't stupid at all! Real nice job :)
Nice take. After just being ordered out though, I think he needs something stronger than a card. Men don't have a clue huh?
So you had a salty popcorn hangover when you wrote this? Well, I am recovering from a sun coma while I read this. I found it completely reviving! Can't wait to see what else you've been writing about while I was sea-sunning away.
Wow, I think you did a fabulous job! Great post.
Good morning this is a test, I'm trying to comment on the other Sat. centus posts through the list and the sign in screen keeps popping on every time I click on post comment.....has that ever happened to you?
Finally it worked! Now I have to go back to the list.......it only gave me trouble on Jenny's .....blogger is great fun...except when it gets kinks!
wonderful! I'm a popcorn lover and now I can see it is great creative medicine!
Pop on!
Judie,
This is such a wonderful take on the prompt! I love the idea of a young man really trying to make things right with his girl. What better solution than Hallmark? And your text is so very compact and visual..Bravo!
Namaste..........cj
oh dear looks like someone is in trouble lol
I'd hate to have to rely on Hallmark to get me out of a pickle.
Popcorn is only popcorn ...but a Hallmark card is forever.
If I may speak for the men in the audience; Hallmark is intimidating. You don't want to appear weak or overbearing , just confused and sort of thick-headed.
Now, Hallmark and the rest of the card industry knows that more than 80% of their sales are to women and so they do not wish to insult their feminine market by making and selling cards that address the male stupidity in relationships. So, the poor male is left to roam through a forest of female sentiments looking for one that says, "I'm only a man and I'm sorry, and please don't hold it against me forever." Or, "I'm sorry! I couldn't my big fat mouth shut!" Most men would rather be dipped in hot wax and placed on the mantlepiece than to have to pick out a Hallmark. So, be generous...we know not what we do.
Dear Count Sneaky:
I have trained Rod to spend an inordinate amount of time picking out just the right card for me. On Valentine's day he gave me two cards! The first one he found in under a minute, so he figured that he had better keep looking, because that was way too easy! I have to admit that the first card was actually perfect, but I would never tell him that!!!
Oh, go ahead and tell him. Let him think for a brief time that he actually knew what he was doing. I have been picking out cards for my wife for 55 years, and she never says that I should have kept looking longer. I, on the other hand, have, by the laws of chance, have picked many less than perfect cards many of which reached out and grabbed me by the lapels and said "Buy me, fool!"
I'm thinking you need to eat more popcorn, Miss Judie! This was wonderful.
Love the amazing visualization here...love the dialogue.
Really excellent!
I will continue to support you, come on!Heartfelt hugs
This is a wonderful article. Thank you for sharing, very exciting.
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