Jekyll Island Beach 2012

Jekyll Island Beach 2012
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Saturday, June 11, 2011

Path To The Other Side

The Rogue Speaks:

i know I am later than usual with my offering, but thanks to Nonna Beach, Jenny has given us 200 words plus the prompt for our Saturday Centus. I feel rich beyond all earthly measures! I think I have used my words wisely, but it is up to you to tell me if I have succeeded!

PATH TO THE OTHER SIDE:


Carefully the two picked their way through the tall grass. The night air was cool and damp, and the full moon cast a pale blue light around them.

“I know it’s around here somewhere,” he whispered to her, and gently pulled her along after him on the overgrown path.

“Why are you whispering?” she asked.

”I don’t know. I guess this place seems almost sacred, like an ancient church-yard filled with old head-stones.”

“Oh,” she said, and she held his hand tighter.

The path ended at a stone wall, not quite as tall as he, with weeds reaching almost to the top. The wall was built long ago, and in between the stones, damp moss, slick and cool, filled the places where crumbling mortar held the stones in place. Reverently, he ran his hands over the wall.

“Hah,” he said after a brief silence. “I knew I would find it again. Wait till you see the gate! This place is really old!”

He was anxious to show her the carved gate with rusting hinges that still kept most intruders out. His heart was beating faster, and beads of sweat began to form on his forehead.

"Here!" he cried at last. "You just won't believe this!"

28 comments:

Ames said...

Hummm I'm wondering if she should go with him. What's on the other side? You've got me wondering. Why do most people stay out??? ~Ames

daydreamertoo.com said...

Good grief, I want to know what's behind the gate!!!! Hmmmmmm.

Great imagery. :)

Thanks for visiting my blog and the lovely comment.

Ames said...

Judie, My sister and I ate at Wildflowers in Tucson. It was excellent! And the dessert, OMG. She had the ginger infused Creme' Brulee' and I had the Bars of Sin. So good. I'd definitely recommend that restaurant to anyone visiting the Tucson area!~Ames

Kat said...

Excellent Judie! I hope you're able to continue this, I must know what is behind that gate! You set the scene so well, I could see it in my mind. I hope she doesn't regret her decision to go with him! Kat

Nonna Beach said...

Outstanding Judie !

I loved all the descriptive words you sprinkled throughout this wonderful cliffhanger to focus on how special this place was to him and how he wanted to share it with her...you left me wanting so much more !

Nonna Beach said...

BTW, thank you for the nice Linky Love too !

Sue said...

Great setting and imagery! Now I reeaaallly want to know what's behind that wall!!

=)

Judie said...

Oh, for God's sake, don't tell JJ! He'll be having me write another novella!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

So glad you referred me over, Judie. It didn't feel right to do the Centus without you. Like everyone, I'm at the edge of my seat here. I don't know if I should thank or curse you but I do love ya!
xoRobyn

Mari Sterling Wilbur said...

Wow! This is gripping! I hope you are going to write about what they encounter on the other side of the fence. A crumbling castle? A very ancient cemetery with remarkable grave markers - the kind with tall angels on guard? Hmmmm - please go on with the story!

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cj Schlottman said...

Great imagery and suspense, Judie. You rock!

Namaste..........cj

Jenny said...

Ahem. Part two, please? Pronto?

I think I need to know what is there...don't make me guess.

PULLLLEEEEZZZE write a part two of this story Miss Judie. In your spare time...or something.

THE SNEE said...

This story really worked! I'm standing on my tippy toes trying to take a peek at the mysterious gate. Is it safe to go in?

I also want to thank you for leaving such great comments at The Snee. I have so much fun when you swing by!

Jo said...

oh i love a good cliffhanger ... you are going to finish this for us ... right??? loved the feel of this piece ... but i need more!

jeff campbell said...

Oh my Judie!! This is so good, and like good sex, leaves you wanting more...maybe like Wildflower noodles too...Peace and blessings

Rek said...

This was a great cliffhanger...what was behind the gate and should she believe him?..I want more of this intriguing tale.

Sarah said...

A secret garden! I'm hoping. Love the way you left us hanging...

Jo said...

Judie...More please!!..can't wait to see what's on the other side.

Hey I'm having my first giveaway June 15th!
Sure hope you can join us(HappierThanAPigInMud),we are having a cookalong with the Pillsbury Doughboy and I'm giving away a Pillsbury cookbook and a doughboy.
~JO
Lazyonloblolly

JJ said...

Judie: Where's the novella?

Judie said...

JJ, I will be working on it after my surgery on Thursday, when I can finally see again! Right now I am only 18" from the screen so I can see the type. Please forgive any misspelled words!!

Magyar said...

Lovit!
__I love the old stone walls and rusty gates... the history and some secrets hidden among the stones!

Grand! _m

Olive said...

This is such a nice leading into something more, making me curious about what's next. I enjoyed reading this post, loved the way you write it. You captured the anticipation well.

askcherlock said...

Judie, this was intense! You could do some wonderful fiction writing if you wanted. You always mange to draw the reader in and poof! We wonder what happened next.

Judie said...

Olive, please fill out your profile so we can go to your blog and visit.

Sister mine, the big day is Thursday, and after that, I may think about writing more!!
xoxo

Cindy Adkins said...

I want to know what's behind the gate!!! If I could just get a peek, I know I'd feel better! lol
XO
Cindy

Adriana Meiss said...

Me too! I want to know what's on the other side of that gate. I hope you're doing fine and will be writing soon. Take care!

ChrisJ said...

You know that you've hit it exactly when everyone - me too - wants to know what's behind the gate!

Good luck on Thursday.

Tgoette said...

LOL! Yes, the suspense is killing me too! Will there be something enchanting on the other side, or something dark and sinister? So when do we tune in and find out? Great job this week Judie!