Jekyll Island Beach 2012

Jekyll Island Beach 2012
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Saturday, June 4, 2011

She Wept

The Rogue Speaks:

The end arrived. No sigh of relief, no peace was felt. Tika took his hand, and wondered just why this had to be. She wept.


Miss Smarty-Pants Jenny tossed us a curve ball with her Saturday Centus. Only 25 words to work with??? Take THAT, Miss Smarty-Pants!!!

28 comments:

Nonna Beach said...

Excellent job Judie ! So sad and heartbreaking in so few words !!!

Jingle said...

lovely.

5thsister said...

They say brevity is the soul of wit: well you are,then, one pretty witty woman

jfb57 said...

Oh my! How gripping. Brilliant!

skoots1mom said...

simply yet richly stated ;)

Ames said...

Perfect! You nailed it!~Ames

cj Schlottman said...

Judie, This piece is visceral and visual and flowing. It touched my heart in that place where loss lives. Wonderful.

Namaste..........cj

PS - I should have thanked you long ago for posting a link to Addie's page. She's not writing much right now - summer job and all that. She has some things in the works, hopes to have them ready soon. Again, thanks.

June Freaking Cleaver said...

Some endings are like that - without closure that allows us to move on.

Great response with our limited word count!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This is really powerful, Judie. You told a whole story here. Awesome job.
Be well, dear friend.
xoRobyn

Sue said...

Lots here in so few words!

=)

Happier Than a Pig in Mud said...

Aw, so sad.

Purvi said...

Wow So much of a build up.. leaves me panting for more! What a story. neat.

Christine said...

There isn't always relief in the end, not for the living that is.

Dazee Dreamer said...

so good. I often wonder how that day will be.

ChrisJ said...

Getting ready for the "twitterverse"???? You obviously have what it takes.

EG Wow said...

You are good with few words, Judie!

Christy said...

so heart-breaking and beautifully written; you drew out emotions with just 25 words!

Tammy said...

Pretty gut-wrenching for 25 words!! Nice job!

Jo said...

make me cry much!!! so much in those 25 little words ...

daydreamertoo.com said...

Yes, it's sad to lose someone we love, and that the longer we live, losing someone is inevitable. It's also amazing how we can describe the pain of that loss in so few words when, they have meant so much to us.
You have a lovely blog.
Thank you for visiting and commenting on mine.

Bookie said...

Isn't is amazing what you can do with 25 words. Your Centus packed a punch!

Olive Tree said...

Don't you just love that prompt? I think the limit of 25 words added to the drama. Your centus is deep. I like it.

Tgoette said...

What a sad and tender moment you captured, and so beautifully and powerfully written. Really well done, Judie!

Rek said...

There is a story in there, waiting to be told...wonderful and touching take. :)

Anna said...

Great centus Judie! Were you thinking of Gone With The Wind here? It would fit well.
Thanks for visiting mine; you are First Commenter.
Best wishes,
Anna
For the benefit of other readers:
Miss O'Hara's Last Words" SC wk 57

Anna said...

Did you quote Scarlett here??? I'll just have to go to "scene selection" and to the last scene and see what really happened.
I did not actually have time to look at the film. I started to, but soon realised that it was not suitable for children. (Elisabet can at time act like Scarlett O'Hara! I don't want to encourage her.)
My very best,
Anna

THE SNEE said...

I want more! Please Jenny, Can Judie write 25 more words!

Jenny said...

You broke my heart. In twenty-five words.

Judie.

Amazing, amazing lady!