The Rogue Speaks:
I knew he was waiting for me. I could feel his essence prickling my neck. It was silent in the grove, save for the call of a crow to its mate, and I could smell the pungent, familiar aroma of dry pine straw beneath the trees.
The floorboards creaked as I approached the door. Silently, he appeared and held out his hand. I touched his fingers, and a current ran through me, to that deep, secret place. I gasped. I could taste the sweat on his lip.
In the decrepitude of that dwelling, everything was once again fresh and new.
30 comments:
So sensual and romantic, Judie.
Great job!
I hope you're well.
xoRobyn
Wow! This is better than a chick flick!
Oooh! I think this needs to be a novel!!
Oh boy, this could be a real page turner LOL. Reminds me of a romance novel, ha. Good job.
Secret rendezvous? Lost loves rekindles? The after life reunion? Sad yet delisciously sensual Judie. I could go in different directions with this one.~Ames
Woo-hoo! Love it - well done.
Hoo-wee! That's one sexy Saturday Centus!!
;)
Wow, what a post! I can picture this as part of one of those romance novels with Fabio (or whoever his replacement is, since he's getting on in years) on the cover. Great job!
sizzzzle.
Aren't you about due to give us some full length pieces?
Wow, sensual heat here...reader feels anticipation!
Judie: I forgot what you told me about when your book will be ready. Please refresh my recollection.
Wow, Judie, hot, hot hot! :)
Sounds like a wonderful new chapter in their lives.
So is this a real beau- human that is? Or perhaps not?
Too, in my own complimentary (complementary) fashion, I'll add this sort of 'haibun':
footsteps
creek up the old stairway
the same face
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Thank you, Doug! It's perfect!!
__You are very welcome Judie!
'Creek' is the stream of footsteps as they 'creak' on the stairway... a word trick that should never be used in haiku/senryu, as some masters say.
so, so good. but then, I can always "see" what you are writing. well done
Oh yes, that secret place and everything is brand new again! They are going to be okay....I sense happiness in their life...right?!!! Nicely done Judie, Your images brought me right there on the floorboards too .....
How romantic, it would take that to make that house into a home!
oooo....lovely, Judie, you've drawn me in! I want to know more!
Splendid Little Stars
Romantic but so many hints at something else too. Great piece, very visual.
Mysterious, sensual, definitely grabs ya' pulls you in. Love it!
We need a longer version of this sultry story. Pleeeeeease!
Woo hoo! That is some description...especially when you consider the most extreme contact in it involves nothing more than fingers and one sweaty lip! :)
wow this is quite engaging! very well done, perfect mood for the photo
This is great! Really getting romantic and steamy! Oooh....
Oh Judie. What a beautiful romantic tale. I loved this.
It's funny...because now when I read this I hear you saying it in my head...
And it's cool.
But a little hard to concentrate.
Lovely.
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