A prompt with 53 words? I am stunned! Jenny has practically written our vignette for us! I should be glad, though! Less typing for me, and far less "backspace!!" This prompt is from her first Saturday Centus, but then most of you already know this since almost all of the comments I get on Saturday are from bloggers who regularly participate.
Well, here's my offering, such as it is. The prompt is in bold type. Now I'm going back to bed!
FREEDOM
I had run far away from the house, and found myself
on the jogging trail north of the woods.
I could never again let that man, the father of my two boys, beat me
down, spewing venom, grasping my throat in his hands. One precise kick gave me a chance to run before
he killed me. But now what? I had only the clothes on my back, and a
twenty tucked into my shoe.
The boys were safe at Dad’s for the summer, and if I
could get to a phone, I could warn him about Dwayne. But then what???
My untied shoelace changed my life.
As I leaned down to re-tie it, I kicked away a few leaves. When I turned my
head slightly to look where the leaves had been, I was astonished to see a
rubber-banded wad of hundred dollar bills nestled in a little indention in the
muddy ground.
15 comments:
Perfection, Judie!
Hello, hope I didn't wake you up! ha ha....so sorry that your hand is still behaving horrible!!! But your awesome and highly creative brain is working double time on this! You even made this a.... to be continued....I hope anyway...we have to know what happened.
Oooo! Tease! Want to know more please! Great building of tension even though I knew what was coming! Brill!
Oh I forgot to mention (that's what's so cool about having you in my blog roll) that this photo is so exquisite!
I loved it. So sad that so many women are faced with circumstances such as these... there was a day that I was one. What I wouldn't have given for that wad of $100s. And how grateful I am that those days are far behind me now.
Hope you made it back to bed and had a good nap! :)
R u n n n n!!!! Geeze Louise Judy my heart started pounding for her. Very moving! And you know it's good if it makes me want to run for her. Hope you feel better soon!~Ames LYMI!!♥
Excellent...perfect.
Peace,
Siggi in Downeast Maine
oh that was so good!!!! I so hope that you are starting to feel a bit better.
Good one!
Wooo! On the lam, in First Class!
Wow, I really love this post sooooo much. This is the type of person that could really use this wad of money. Good job.
I would have to call that kind of find providential in her case.
Great story, and all too true for far too many.
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I like creative thinking, and I like this. I never would have thought of putting the prompt at the end, but here it works perfectly. Bravo!
excellent! riveting!
Hope your nap was good!
I was really surprised when I read how long the first prompt was. Geez. Talk about being long winded here! ha!
Love what you did with this. It is interesting to see how there is less wild interpretation with the longer prompt.
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