Jekyll Island Beach 2012

Jekyll Island Beach 2012

Saturday, October 9, 2010

Saturday Centus - If I Had A Hammer

The Rogue Speaks:

I had a really cool photo for this post, but someone reminded me that I could not use photos for Saturday Centus, so I took it down today. You'll just have to imagine a photo of a bad man with a gun. For those of you who are not familiar with Jenny Matlock's Saturday Centus, Jenny gives us a prompt each Saturday and we have to write a story around it in 100 words ONLY! Here's my entry:

IF I HAD A HAMMER:

"If I had a hammer, we could break that window and climb out."
"Yeah, well we DON'T, and the window is too high up!"
"We didn't even know that guy!! Stupid! What did we drink? A date-rape drug?"
"Probably. How long have we been here?"
"I don't know! Hours, I guess."
"My cell phone! I found it! I'm calling my dad!"
"First, call 911, you ninny! And make it quick! I think I hear someone!"
"Well, hello, ladies! I see you finally woke up! Have a nice nap, did ya?
Now which one of you wants to be first?? Hey!! What's going on??"
"Police!! Drop your weapon!!"

20 comments:

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

What a twist. I loved it - the fright, humor, and suspense. You do it all with so few words! Great job.
xoRobyn

Sarah said...

Date rape drug? I'm sooo glad it has a happy ending.Whew!

Anonymous said...

Oh I'm glad the police showed up! Well done -

Cheryl said...

Great take on the prompt. Glad it ended happily.

Ames said...

Wha??? What's going on?? Was I watching a cop show?? Great use of the prompt!~Ames

Deborah said...

So well done in 100 words...brilliant!

jfb57 said...

Phew! Just in time eh! Good take on the prompt!

Terra said...

YIKES! That was creepy! Well done! Glad they called 911

Viki said...

Looks like the police came in the nick of time. Sure would like to know more about the beginning of this story. Good job.

gautami tripathy said...

Great build up!

that hammer

Cher Duncombe said...

Is the Law and Disorder? It was great humor, Judie and somehow I could so picture you!

Anonymous said...

whew...that sounded soooo real...

jeff campbell said...

Tense...do you watch a lot of Criminal Minds? Peace and blessings my friend...

Judie said...

Haha! Jeff, I do watch Criminal Minds, and Law and Order, and a few others! I also read mysteries and detective stories.

Unknown said...

Just like a crime story.
Looking at the sidebar, I suspect that you watch a lot of tv after the children are asleep. Or have done so in the past.
I am in a similar situation. I see only movies for children. More grown-up books are read a couple of sentences at a time before I fall asleep exhausted. So everything I write as a touch of Tinkerbelle or Cinderella in it.

Nice post.

Forgive me for being picky, but one of the rules for SC is that we are not allowed to use any illustrations. The photo of the thug has to go! Yes, I know it is frustrating if you are a picture-person. I am too. But rules are rules! Ask Mrs. M.
Best wishes & hugs,
Anna

For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's SC Week 23

Unknown said...

Oh, Judie, is this your blog?
I can't find any 'Friend Connect', so I can't follow your blog.
Lots of really cool images here. Nice!
Hugs,
Anna

Unknown said...

Dear Judie,
Thank you for visiting my SC-post#23!
Hugs again,
Anna
Anna's SC Week 23

Kat said...

You packed alot of tension in such a short story! Great take on the prompt! Kat

Joann Mannix said...

Hello my friend! I'm back, making my favorite rounds.

Judie, that was stellar! It was so twisty, turny! You had me at every word. Great, great job. Okay, so now it's your turn. Send me a novel. You could definitely write a good one.

Jenny said...

Twisty, turny. I almost needed a roadmap for the emotions I felt reading this post!

I heard the suspenseful music playing in the back of my head!

It was cool.

And so are you. You didn't need a picture with this story...I could visualize it all so very clearly.

Thank you for linking.