The Rogue Speaks:
Well, I made the mistake of reading the first five entries for Jenny's Saturday Centus before I began composing my own. OMG! I was blown away by the incredible poetics of those entries! Frankly, I don't think I can compete, and that's the truth! I'm not a quitter, though, so here goes. The prompt is in bold type.
The pains were coming quicker, stronger now. Beads of sweat formed on Cerise's brow, and her hands felt icy. She glanced over at Edward, eyes intent on the road ahead.
"Don't let him know just how bad it is!" she screamed inside her own head.
The patchy fog swept over the four-lane and Edward strained to see road markers that would tell him just where they were. Suddenly a road sign appeared out of the ghostly swirl, "Exit 181, 1/2 mile ahead."
"Thank God!" Edward cried, betraying his stress and fear. "Don't push, Cerise! The hospital is only minutes away!"
23 comments:
Such a wonderfully creative take on this prompt...and I had no idea until the end...Peace and blessings
Oh man...it wouldn't be the 1st babe born in a car! Here's hoping they make it in time. Very original and clever my friend!
Very well done ! No need to worry at all...that's why I never read the other submissions before I have posted my own !
Well shoot Judie, I think that is just down right brilliant! You didn't have any trouble what so ever coming up with such a clever use of this prompt.
I say, Jenny you are just going to have to do better than this prompt if you are going to stump us!~Ames
I've been there. We reached the hospital just in time!
I've lived this one! Except your protagonist is more noble than I. (I was definitely letting my husband know how painful it was...)
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Lovely and very clever...unexpected ending, hoping she made it to the hospital in time.
So good. I try not to read anyones until I written mine. Yours was awesome tho. loved it.
oh goodness....I didn't see that coming....and neither did the to of them by the way they left it so late! :) I enjoyed this and felt the urgency of the situation even before I know about the baby.
Judy, this was wonderful ... I loved it! yours is the only submission i have read ... i still haven't thought of my own.
great take on this! Hard as this is to believe that really happened to me. We ran out of gas under the exit sign to the hospital, got picked up by a passer by, and I delivered at the hospital 20 minutes later! Oh, and it was January in New Hampshire
Judie, a truly wonderful job! Couldn't be more perfect.
Excellent job! But men (or doctors) don't know telling a woman not to push when she's in labor is impossible!
You are brave to read the other ones first; I'd shut down right away. But this one is excellent.
Excellent! You got the panic in both of them!
This was a thrilling trip, Judie. I love the unexpected last line. I'm sure glad I didn't read yours before writing mine. I'd have fainted!
xoRobyn
Wow, Judie, another coup! I was actually relieved by the last line and remembered the time I was in labor. After warning my EX hundreds of times to make certain there was gas in the car, guess what? No gas that night. By the time we got to the hospital, my daughter was born 20 minutes later. This is just one reason he is my EX!
Awesome Sir!
You certainly are your own harshest critic! This is just perfect for the prompt. And the idea of new life, well, it speaks of spring.
Thanks..........cj
beautifully narrated
just a minute away
Prompts can be challenging, and I think this one was tricky! Your way with words grabbed me again. I always enjoy dropping In for a tasty writing treat, and leave always wanting more.
Thank you for stopping by.
Exactly why never start reading until I write. There are such amazing writers on this meme that I think I would intimidate myself out of actually posting anything.
I loved how believable yours was. I almost let myself read your 'April Showers' one, but I resisted!
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